ENGL 252 Kizzier

Writer’s Response 1

1. What kind of intro are you using? Why?
My intro is sort of a question. I would like to change it to an anecdote in order to excite and mirror the scenes I rely on in order to interest. A question may work if I can make it flow more smoothly, and make it seem as though I’m asking it instead of giving an example of one.


2. What do you like best about your paper right now? Why?
I like some of my sentences, but not all of them. But some of them are neat, long, and I think certain ones said something close to what I wanted. I also think my paper does an alright job of moving between the three stories I chose.

3. What would you work on if you had more time? Why? Try and be specific and please, no comments about grammar. I would work on my introduction because it is lifeless. I also may try to include more from the first story. My closing could use some work also. It wraps things up the way a children’s movie does. And parts of my paper could flow more smoothly, or be tighter… I really don’t like it and will be revising it until I have to hand it in.